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[his_nemesis]

Questions or concerns on how I play Harry? Any tips or advice? Come and tell me right here.
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AIM: deatheatercrouch

EMAIL doctorbanana1@googlemail.com

PLURK: ThorinII

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[crit]

Hello! I noticed that you did not participate in the game-wide How's My Driving post, so I hope it's okay to come here.

I've noticed for some time that you seem to have a hard time keeping up with the game and its mechanics. In the past you have made posts that conflict with the current plots of the game despite there being numerous announcements of what is going on in the OOC community. Are you making sure to follow the OOC community so that you are up to date with what's going on?

In your most recent post with Harry, he calls out to Hermione, who was dropped almost two weeks ago. The player made an announcement, and yet it appears that you are unaware of this. This could be another example of not paying close enough attention to what's currently going on in the game.

There is also a lack of variety to the posts that you make with your characters. While it's good to have posts that are open for anyone to tag into, they do seem very generic. Harry, for example, has made several posts in a row in which he has lost an item or is giving an open invitation for people to do an activity with him. There's little insight into his thought processes. With so many similar posts, it can lead to others not wanting to play out the same scenes. Bilbo's posts are also very generic, and there is little display of his true character.

With both characters making such generic, every day posts, their voices are beginning to sound incredibly similar. Without looking at their icons, it would be difficult to tell them apart. It might be a good time to do a canon review for your characters so that their voices are more fresh and sound less like each other, as they are starting to do.

Thank you for your time!

[his_nemesis]

I have been meaning to post in the HMD in game but haven't gotten around to yet.

Thank you for the crit and I hope to improve both Harry and Bilbo for the future. I aim to let them speak their own voices and be the people they are meant to be. Forgive me, if I do not show them in their true light. I will work on this and hope my past mistakes will not interfere with my future role playing.

I appreciate your help on this matter and I hope to improve for the year coming.

Thank you!